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Hi , maribel

Hi marible , how are you?
You said to me that you want me to write here down about my plan of weekend.
So, now I'm on ways to get up in Seoul from Busan. I went to Busan with my mom, aunt and aunt's son.
Because it is memorial service of grandmother on my mother's side.
In Korea, if parents passed away, their offspring, especially son, usually perform memorial service.
But my uncle's wife doesn't want to perform it anymore, so my mom and aunts visit grave.
So, we left Ilsan where now I lived 2:00 p.m. and reached 7:00 p.m.
We met another aunt's family, and had dinner. We ate Korean beef and drank a lot of alcohol.
Next day, we start early to visit grave. We performed memorial service and said greetings to grandmother and grandfather on my mom's side.
And then we had brunch and went to the cafe, now I'm on ways to get up in Seoul.
Maybe I think that I will take 5 hours to get in Seoul. ^^
So, see you tomorrow maribel. Take care. Bye 😆

Hi Maribel, how are you?

You said that you want me to write about my plan this weekend. I am now on my way to Busan. I am going to Busan with my mom’ and my cousin to observe the memorial service of my grandmother in my mother’s side.

In Korea, if the parent’s pass away, the children especially the son usually performs the memorial service. However my uncle’s wife didn’t want to perform it anymore so my mom’ and aunt visits the grave instead. We left Ilsan at 2:00 o’clock in the afternoon and reached Busan at around 7:00 o’clock. We met another aunt and her family to have dinner. We ate Korean beef and drank alcohol. The following day,we went to visit the grave.We performed the traditional memorial service and said our greetings. We then had brunch to a café then drove back to Seoul. I think it will take us about hours to reach Seoul.

See you tomorrow Maribel, take care!

REPLY: Hi Amber,reading your letter is just like being in Busan as well. I drove with you without you knowing it. Kidding aside, it’s a great composition. Maybe next time I’ll ask you to write a poem instead.

See you later and happy Monday!

 


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