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Hello, Shasha ! It's nice to meet you.
I'd like to write down some essay, plz check and correct this :)
And Sahsha, do you have any idea for the conclusion?

Have you ever had a difficult situation ? and how did you overcome it?

- Everyone has many difficult situations in their life. These situation can be light or heavy. And sometimes they are too memorable to have matters. Or on the contrary to this, they keep a memory because it was very strong. So do I.
One of my friends killed herself when we were high-school students. At that time she was a suspender of a little thief and some friends who were in her same class bullied her. Unfortunately we were in the other class but i tried to prove her innocent everyday until it happened.
Nevertheless it didn't work. they didn't stop bulling and finally she committed suicide. I regretted that if I told parent or senior, we could solve this situation.
After that, I tried to live life to full instead of her and for me more. Every time i put in a stressful situation, I reminded her. It's motivated to escape from that. I believe she is with me until now.

Hello, Shasha ! It's nice to meet you.
I'd like to write down an essay, plz check and correct this :)
And Shasha, do you have any idea for the conclusion?

Have you ever had a difficult situation ? and how did you overcome it?

- Everyone of us has many difficult situations in ourlives. These situations could be light or heavy. And sometimes they are too memorable enough that lt leaves an important space in our hearts. A memory that too  strong. Let me share my experience..

One of my friend committed a suicide when we were a high-school student. At that time,  she was suspended because she stole something and because of that her classmates bullied her. Unfortunately we were in the other class but with all my might  i tried to prove her innocence everyday. Until the tragic day happened.

I wish i could have done more to defend her.   If only i have the strength to report it to my parents and my to  seniors, somehow we were able to solve the problem.


After that horrible moment, I am  trying to live my life to the fullest. Every time i am in a stressful situation, I always reminded of her. It  encourages me that life is a battle. We have to fight. I have learned to accept that it is not my fault why bad things happen to me or to the people around me. It's just the way life deals with everyone. It's not fair. If you are one of the unlucky ones, then fight.  Be stronger, that's what life telling you. Be stronger because you have no choice. Be stronger than you are right now because if you don't, you'll die with the weak. Life is too short, make it meaningful and beautiful.
 


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