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I have many plans for my new year 2016.
I couldn't do many experiences, because there were so many tests. But while I read the books <>, <> which are about doctors' life, I started to be a doctor. And there are some my own plans to goal in my dream, dcotor.

I knew that a doctor have to study hard, and try a lot of things. In Korea, To be a doctor, the dreamer has to rank in
0.0( )% in the final test. The final test is very important for us, because it effects our life. We can't sure that test is not all of our life, and the score cant show us correctly. But, in Korea, the students who want to live comfortable, have to study hard since their middle school.

If I enter the medical university(fortunately), I have to study 6 years. And after 6 years, I have to pass the doctor test.
And if it passes, we can experience each medical parts.(surgery, anesthesiplogy, dermatology, internal medicine, pediatrics, grthopedics, plastic surgery, ...ect). And after this process, I can learn my interested part through the test. And final, I can be an expert.
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Recently, my dream was changed to be a doctor! I wrote my own essay in my free time!
I will write my essay2~ Please expect my connected essay~ Thank you teacher^^

<My Dreams and Plans for my Future>
I have many plans for the year 2016. I wasn't able to experience a lot of things because I had so many tests. But while I was reading the books about doctors' life, written by Dr. Tae su Cho, a great surgeon, I started to dream to become a doctor. I began creating my own plans and goals to pursue my ambition of becoming a doctor.

I know that if you want to be a doctor, you need to study hard and try a lot of things.  In Korea, the dreamer has to rank 0.0( )% in the final test. The final test is very important for us because it would affect our lives. We're not sure if we will pass or not. But in Korea, the students who want to live a comfortable life, have to study hard since middle school.

If I will enter the medical university(fortunately), I have to study 6 years. And after 6 years, I have to pass the doctors board exam.
If I pass, I could experience each medical specialty such as surgery, anesthesiplogy, dermatology, internal medicine, pediatrics, grthopedics, plastic surgery, and etc. Then after this process, I could focus and learn about my chosen medical specialty through out the test. And finally, I could be an expert!

 


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