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stolen bicycle 2

We wanted to unlock and bring it. however the cops adviced that we should wait for the policeman could catch him by cctv. In case the current owner might buy the used one which was actually his from the thief. we don't have any choice except for accepting his advice. but the bike couldn't return to him all like we wanted it to. because the cctv which was there didn't sense that spot. we were heard it's too difficult to get it back. there were too many lost bikes which students put everywhere.

We wanted to unlock and bring it. However, the cops adviced that we should wait for them policeman could to catch him the current owner by in the CCTV in case the current owner he might buy the used one which was actually his it from the thief. We didn't have any choice except for accepting his advice but the bike couldn't wasn't return to him at all like we wanted it to because the cctv which was there didn't sense capture that spot. We were heard it's too difficult to get it back. There were too many lost bikes which students put everywhere.

 

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[sense] [capture] capture it more appropriate ord when talking about cameras

CCTV capitalize everything because it's an acronym for closed-circuit television

 

by in the CCTV]

The CCTV will not catch the thief. The thief will be caught in the CCTV footage. 

 

[ to catch him the current owner by in the CCTV in case the current owner he might buy]

notice that I have exchanged 'him' and 'the current owner'.

You may use the pronoun 'him' later in the same sentence since we already know which 'him' you are referring to [the current owner] 

 

[However, the cops adviced that we should wait for them policeman ]

Delte the word policeman. It's already redundant to use cop and policeman in the same sentence. 


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