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I went to Expo which is located in the Gyeongju~
I went to there by my friend Minseo's car. I takes about 20minutes.
Before we go there, at my school, I want to do magic show and CSI science, but it is popular for my classmates, so I have to do picking game. I want to pick last paper but my frineds and teacher said "Pick it quickly!" So I picked bad thing so I have to do another thing.
I checked my studying project for science-Robot and DSLR camera!
I did them with my friend JI-HYUN.
AM studying was DSLR, and we went to the outside~ Other friends took the pictures in 5 minutes, but in our case, we want to take picture butiful, and there are so many things to look!
We finialy decided to pregentation our pictures, 견우 직녀(1),and its backgrounds(2 pictures!)
My teacher said "It is so great. It has many backgrounds and it has much exploed. And견우직녀 tooked by great golden ratio(황금비). In fact, I can't take pictures. But I felt so fun, when I take pcitures. (So We took pictures for 1 hour!)
And PM class was Science robot.
I played with Robot which is named roboboa and another robbot(I don't remember this robot;; Sorry!)
At first it doesn't move well, but is was so cute!
But later, it tricked me, and we played well.
It smiled so much, and it danced very well.
I want to play with it again!
This picnic was so fun!
I really want to go Expo with my family again, and I hope to have fun like today!


I went to Expo which is located in  Gyeongju~
I went  there with my friend's car. The travel took for 20minutes.
Before we go there, We stayed in our school for a while.  I want to do magic show and CSI science but it is popular for my classmates, so I have to do the picking game.
I want to pick the last paper but my friends and teacher said "Pick it quickly!" but I picked the bad thing so I have to do it over again.
I checked my studying project for science-Robot and DSLR camera!
I did them with my friend JI-HYUN.
As I was checking the  DSLR, we hurridly went  outside. My other friends took some  pictures for 5 minutes but in our case, we want to take the view perfectly. There are so many things to look!
We finally decided to present our pictures, 견우 직녀(1),and its backgrounds(2 pictures!)
My teacher said "It was so great. It has many background and it has a good style. And견우직녀 captured by great golden angle(황금비). In fact, I am not fond of taking pictures but i had a lot of fun. In fact, we do it over again for an hour.

PM class was Science robot.
I played with the Robot named roboboa and the other robbot(I don't remember this robot;; Sorry!)
At first it doesn't move well, but is was so cute!
But few minutes was a surprise. it was a good trick because the robot worked well.
We played together. It smiled so much, and it danced very well.
I want to play with it again!
This picnic was so fun!
I really want to go to Expo with my family again, and I hope to have fun like today!


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