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I have had many surgeries since I was very sick, and now I still have a disease called hypothyroidism.So I have to keep controlling my weight, but recently I couldn't control it,so I gained a lot of weight and my thyroid level went up a bit.So, I recently registered my cousin's special martial arts to practice.I haven't started yet,but I think it might be interesting.I kept thinking I wanted it to be thin.In the future,I hope that I will continue to practice special martial arts and become thin.

I have had many surgeries since I was very sick, and now I still have a disease called hypothyroidism.So I have to keep controlling my weight, but recently I couldn't control it,so I gained a lot of weight and my thyroid level went up a bit.So, I recently registered my cousin's special martial arts to practice.I haven't started yet,but I think it might be interesting.I kept thinking I wanted it to be thin.In the future,I hope that I will continue to practice special martial arts and become thin.

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I'm glad that you wrote an essay about your worries and goals. I'll root for you to work hard and become a fit and healthy individual. ^_^ You'll see the corrections I've written for you below. Have a great day!

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I had many surgeries due to my fragile body. I easily get sick and I’m still under for my hypothyroidism. I have to control my weight, but recently I having a hard time controlling it. As a result, I gained a lot of weight and my thyroid level went up. That is why I registered in my cousin's special martial arts to practice and exercise. I haven't started yet, but I think it might be interesting. I’ve been wishing to be thin. In the future, I hope that I will keep on practicing special martial arts and become fit and healthy.

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