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The present age is the age of abundance of foods, some people call it as age of no starvation. Nevertheless, there are places where food is scarce even in this day. Despite advancement of technological and global trades, why are there places of hunger, and how can we solve them? This essay will discuss about it.

Many factors are effected the agriculture. among them, most important thing is geography and weather. in some countries, the successful harvests are achieved only by plowing and sowing the seeds. Several harvests are possible in same ground. On the other hand, in some countries, even with great effort, there are cases where harvest is not possible due to natural disasters. For instance, most of Africa are areas where is hard to harvest the food such as rice, four, corn and potato, which are classified food and agriculture. How about trade the food with other counties? It is not easy. most of Africa are poor countries and they don’t have enough budget to buy the food for their national.

Then how can we solve it? The solution is to find a way to cultivate regardless of climate and geography. Or finding a custom way for country where is suffered the hungry so that we don’t need to worry about the food. it needs many of investigates and experiments. To achieve it, all the countries have to join forces. The rich countries should support it and the countries that will receive help have to cooperate well. Then finally we will meet the world without starvation.

The present age is the age of abundance of food, some people call it an age of no starvation. Nevertheless, there are still places where foods are scarce even in this modern day. In spite of the advancement of technological and global trades, why are there some places still lacking food, and how can we solve them? This essay will discuss it.
 
Many factors have affected agriculture. Among them, the most important things are geography and weather. In some countries, successful harvests are achieved simply by plowing and sowing the seeds. Several harvests are possible on the same ground. On the other hand, in some countries, even with great effort, there are cases where the harvest is not possible due to natural disasters. For instance, in most African areas where it's hard to harvest agricultural food such as rice, flour, corn, and potato. How about trading the food with other countries? It is not easy, most African nations are poor, and they don’t have enough budget to buy food for their people.
 
Then how can we solve it? The solution is to find a way to cultivate lands regardless of climate and geography. It must be a customized way so countries that are suffering from hunger don’t need to worry about the food. It needs many investigations and experiments. To achieve it, all the countries have to join forces. The rich countries should support it and the countries that will receive help have to cooperate as well. Then finally we will meet the world without starvation.

NOTE: Anna, pay attention to singular and plural forms. Also, find a way to properly structure your sentence, do not jumble the first and third-person as well.

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