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Korea to end shutdown law

Today I’m going to talk about Korea to end shutdown law.
My opinion is that end shutdown law is good for teenagers.
There is a reason why I agree with it.

The reason why I agree is some people might want to be a professional gamers.
They have to practice and study hard to be a professional gamers.
If those people are busy during morning and afternoon, they have to practice games at night.
But if they can’t playing games at night, then their dreams can be influenced.
So I think let’s let them play games at night and ask parents to tell their children play moderately.

In conclusion, I agree with end shutdown law.
What is your opinion?
I think we can do debate with this topic.

Bye:)

Today I’m going to talk about Korea to end shutdown law.
My opinion is that End shutdown law is good for teenagers.
There is a reason why I agree with it.

Firstly, I agree that some people might want to be a professional gamers.
They have to practice and study hard to be a professional gamers.
If those people are busy during morning and afternoon, they have to practice games at night.
But if they can’t play games at night, then their dreams can be influenced.
So I think  let them play games at night and with the supervision of their parents in moderate use.

In conclusion, I agree with end shutdown law.
What is your opinion?
I think we can do debate with this topic.

Bye:)

 

We do have different likes and ways to entertain ourselves most specially during free time.

So do I believed that all things can be taken well off in moderation.

Games are designed to entertain for free time and for past time not to make a habit and worst become a vise.

My ove all opinon for this is that to have self control and be responsible at all times.

 

Teacher Sheena 


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