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If I can have one special power

If I can have one special power, I would have power that can make everything what I think. But when I use that power outdoor, like school, It will be bad. So I think I'll don't use that at outside. But if I can't control the power, it will be disaster I think. So I'll try not to use the power. If I really want to use it, I'll use it at the place people can't see, and hide the thing quickly before people and when I get spotted, I'll act like it was always mine. It will be good to have power but I think I would be careful too.

If I can have one special power, I would have power that can make everything what I think. But when I use that power outdoor, like school, It will be bad. So I think I'll don't use that at outside. But if I can't control the power, it will be disaster I think. So I'll try not to use the power. If I really want to use it, I'll use it at the place people can't see, and hide the thing quickly before people and when I get spotted, I'll act like it was always mine. It will be good to have power but I think I would be careful too.

 

CORRECTION: 

If I can have one special power, I would have the power that can make everything I think. But when I use that power outdoor, like at school, it will be bad. So, I think, I will not use that outside. Because if I can't control my power, it will be a disaster, in my opinion. So I'll try not to use it. If I really want to use it, I'll use it at a place where people won't see and hide it quickly. And when I get spotted, I'll act like it was always mine. It will be good to have power but I think I should be careful, too.

NOTE:

You did well dear. Please be careful of some wordsto use. As you can see, I made corrections with words "should", "would", on how will you use those. Please take note of that. Thank you! Keep up the good work. 


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