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It was 8:46 a.m. It was just usual New York morning. People are going for their work and many people were on the street. And in the sky, there was a loud noise such as an airplane. And it collided with the world trade center. At first, people were don't know what was actually happened. Many broadcasting companies came and broadcasting the incident as an accident. And eventually, at 9:03 (10:03 p.m. Korea Standard Time), when the northern tower was almost broadcast live around the world through media outlets, the second plane terrorist attack occurred with countless people's eyes and broadcast cameras all facing the World Trade Center. While each media outlet was broadcasting the northern tower burning, those who saw another plane crash into the southern tower live were shocked. This proves that it is very meticulous terrorism, which clearly conveyed the message of terrorism by colliding once more with a time difference with attention immediately after the collision of the northern tower. The second terrorist attack, while people are watching the scene of the accident, is still unprecedentedly shocking.

It was 8:46 a.m. It was just usual New York morning. People are going for their work and many people were on the street. And in the sky, there was a loud noise such as an airplane. And it collided with the world trade center. At first, people didn’t know what was actually happening. Many broadcasting companies came and broadcasted the incident as an accident. And eventually, at 9:03 (10:03 p.m. Korea Standard Time), when the northern tower was almost broadcast live around the world through media outlets, the second plane terrorist attack occurred with countless people's eyes and broadcast cameras all facing the World Trade Center. While each media outlet was broadcasting the northern tower burning, those who saw another plane crash into the southern tower live were shocked. This proves that it was very meticulous terrorism, which clearly conveyed the message of terrorism by colliding once more with a time difference with attention immediately after the collision of the northern tower. The second terrorist attacked, while people were watching the scene of the incident, was still unprecedentedly shocking.


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