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When I decided to quit my job, one brother’s experience helped me a lot. I heard story of one brother’s experience. He worked at Bethel in Canada. But when Bethel was reduced in the world, he left Bethel. After he left Bethel, he really missed Bethel life and he didn’t know how to live. One night, he prayed to God seriously. He said that he will give God all his fortune, please listen to his wish. He asked God for one of the three wishes to hear. One thing is that help him to go back to Bethel or let him appoint to territory where need to more people or gave him opportunity to go to China for preaching. Because he is an Chinese Canadian. Only one lorry was a his all possession. After pray he didn’t know how to donate lorry to God. When he attend to preaching next day, he heard that one CO had to go back to hometown because he had a new appointment. He needed to lorry to go back his hometown. When he heard about it, he felt that God’s guidance. So he asked to CO to use his lorry to sell it and dominate. After that he had a opportunity to go China to preaching. He had studied to Korean since he heard that Korean Bethel oversee whole China. Because he really wanted to work in Bethel again. That time many friends include Korean against him. Studying Korean was not worth it and wasting time. They recommended him to study Canton dialect instead of Korean. So when one brother who came from Korean Bethel visited to his congregation asked to him studying Korean is no meaning

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When I decided to quit my job, the experiences of one of my brother's in faith helped me a lot when I heard about his story. He worked at a Bethel in Canada. But when the number of Bethels in the world decreased, he left. After leaving, he really missed Bethel life and he didn’t know how to live. One night, he prayed to God seriously. He said that he would give God all his fortune if his prayers would be answered. He asked God for three things. One was to help him to go back to Bethel, second was to let him be appointed to a territory where he's needed to minister to more people, and third was to give him an opportunity to go to China to preach beecause he is a Chinese-Canadian. He only had one possession and that was his lorry. After praying, he didn’t know how to donate his lorry to God. When he attended a service the next day, he heard that one CO had to go back to his hometown because he had an appointment. He needed a lorry to go back to his hometown. When he heard about it, he felt God’s guidance. So he told the CO to take his lorry and sell it. After that, he had an opportunity to go to China to preach. He had studied Korean since he heard that Korean Bethel oversees the whole China and because he really wanted to work in Bethel again. That time many of his friends were against him including his Korean friends. Studying Korean was not worth it and a waste of time. They recommended him to study Cantonese instead of Korean. A brother, who came from Korean Bethel, had visited to his congregation and told him that studying Korean had no meaning.


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