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Everyone has their good points and bad points. One of the my good point is considerate others. I don’t want to hurt others by words or indeed. And I also don’t want to be hurt from others. Now a days I realized that when I considered others I didn’t take care myself. I dislike those people who are saying very directly without considerate others. They say that they are very cool and not hold grudges. But the other person got hurt for a long time. Was it possible say that is cool? I don’t want to imagine that kind of situation for example if one person got hurt by me and she pray to God to blame me. Maybe God is not easy to bless me. I think a lot before make a decision. To give it a hard name, I’m indecisive. It’s not easy for me to decide something. I need to discuss with others before make a decision. But I made a decision, I do my best. Maybe I already imagined if I choose this, what I will do. And I didn’t impulse buying. If I want to buy something, I consider that I really need it and where is the cheapest etc. But sometimes that’s why I missed good chance. Last nights, I did online shopping. There were a promotion of clothes and shoes. I thought that even if these are very cheap but I rarely go outside these days. Was it really need to me? Won’t regret it? And then I decided to but it. But that was already sold out. When that was sold out, I regret that consider many things. I kept thinking about missing clothes and shoes last night. Sometimes it’s not easy to make a decision at good timing. I don’t want to miss good opportunity in my life.

Hi Zoe!

Here are the corrections:


Everyone has their good points and bad points.

- Everyone has good and bad points.


One of the my good point is considerate others.

- One of my good points is being considerate of others.


I don’t want to hurt others by words or indeed.

- I don't want to hurt others by words or by actions.

  

And I also don’t want to be hurt from others.

- I also don't want to be hurt by others.


Now a days I realized that when I considered others I didn’t take care myself.

- Recently, I realized that when I am considerate of others, I forget to take care of myself first.

    

I dislike those people who are saying very directly without considerate others.

- I dislike people who are saying things very directly without being considerate of others. 


They say that they are very cool and not hold grudges. But the other person got hurt for a long time.

- They say that they are very cool and don't hold grudges, but the other person got hurt for a long time.


Was it possible say that is cool?

- Are they really cool?


I don’t want to imagine that kind of situation for example if one person got hurt by me and she pray to God to blame me.Maybe God is not easy to bless me.

- I don't want to be in that kind of situation. For example, if I hurt a person and she prayed to God about it, maybe He won't bless me. 


I think a lot before make a decision.

- I think a lot of times before I make a decision. 


To give it a hard name, I’m indecisive. 

- To be honest, I'm indecisive. 


It’s not easy for me to decide something.

- It's not easy for me to decide on something.


I need to discuss with others before make a decision. But I made a decision, I do my best.

- I need to discuss it first with others before I make a decision. And when I finally made a decison, I do my best. 

 

Maybe I already imagined if I choose this, what I will do.

- I already imagine the things that I will do if I choose a certain option.  


And I didn’t impulse buying. If I want to buy something,

- I don't do impulse buying if I want to buy something.


I consider that I really need it and where is the cheapest etc.

- I consider some factors like it's necessity, where to buy it at the lowest price, etc. 

 

But sometimes that’s why I missed good chance.

- But sometimes that's the reason why I miss good chances. 

 

Last nights, I did online shopping.

- Last night, I shopped online.


There were a promotion of clothes and shoes.

- There were promotions of clothes and shoes.


I thought that even if these are very cheap but I rarely go outside these days.

- I thought that even though they were very cheap, I wouldn't be able to wear them often because I rarely go outside these days. 


Was it really need to me? Won’t regret it? And then I decided to but it. But that was already sold out.

- I asked myself some questions before making a decision. Do I really need them? Won't I regret it? And then when I decided to buy them, they were already sold out.  


When that was sold out, I regret that consider many things.

- When they were already sold out, I regretted that I had to consider many things before deciding. 


I kept thinking about missing clothes and shoes last night.

- I kept thinking about how I missed the chance to buy clothes and shoes last night. 


Sometimes it’s not easy to make a decision at good timing.

- Sometimes it's not easy to make a decison at a proper time. 


I don’t want to miss good opportunity in my life.

- I don't want to miss good opportunities in my life. 

 


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