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You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter
- correct the information in the article
- explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information
- suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to correct some information about our town you wrote down in the magazine which has been released
yesterday. You have described about a museum in Busan city and some information about it such as business days, cost for the tickets and the direction of parking lots etc. However, I've just found out you mentioned they won't close it on the weekend but it is not true. It will be closed on the weekend during summer season now and They will open it on the weekend in winter time only. I'd like you to correct it immediately since it is important for the tourists not to waste time during their vacation and I strongly believe that if someone see incorrect information and visit there, they won't subscribe your magazine anymore. Also they will be disappointed with visiting our town. It might screw up not only your reputation but also our town of it. As a big fan of yours I suggest you to email all of your subscribers and upload on the social media about the matter of this.I am looking forward to seeing right information as quickly as possible.

Best regards,
Billie Han

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter
- correct the information in the article
- explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information
- suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to correct some information about our town you wrote down in the magazine which has been released
yesterday. You have described about a museum in Busan city and some information about it such as business days, cost for the tickets and the direction of parking lots etc. However, I've just found out you mentioned they won't close it on the weekend but it is not true. It will be closed on the weekend during summer season now and They will open it on the weekend in winter time only. I'd like you to correct it immediately since it is important for the tourists not to waste time during their vacation and I strongly believe that if someone see incorrect information and visit there, they won't subscribe your magazine anymore. Also they will be disappointed with visiting our town. It might screw up not only your reputation but also our town of it. As a big fan of yours I suggest you to email all of your subscribers and upload on the social media about the matter of this.I am looking forward to seeing right information as quickly as possible.

Best regards,
Billie Han

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You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter
- correct the information in the article
- explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information
- suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to correct some information about our town you wrote down in the magazine which has been released
yesterday. You have described about a museum in Busan city and some information about it such as business days, cost of the tickets and the direction of parking lots etc. However, I've just found out that you mentioned they won't close it on the weekend but it is not true. It will be closed on the weekend during summer season and they will be open on the weekend in winter time only. I'd like you to correct it immediately since it is important for the tourists not to waste time during their vacation and I strongly believe that if someone see incorrect information and visit there, they won't subscribe to your magazine anymore. Also they will be disappointed in visiting our town. It might ruin/devastate/damage (don't use screw up because it is an informal expressions) not only your reputation but also our town's. As a big fan of yours, I suggest that you to email all of your subscribers and upload on social media about this matter.I am looking forward to seeing the corrected information as quickly as possible.

Best regards,
Billie Han


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