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Hello Venice.
When I speak English, I try to focus on making sentence in my mind.
So I miss thinking of focusing on my accent..
And my voice is originally small
But I will try to pronounce focusing my accent tomorrow.
Always Thank you.
There are questions below.
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2:53 If you have more ( ), just kindly tell me.
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Please correct this one. Thank you

I have worked for a cleaning company at pub in Brisbane, Australia.
At that time, I was a supervisor. I needed to manage workers.
Cleaning jobs require workers to be very precise.
Sometimes, it was hard to manage workers.
Because It was different between my precision and their precision
It's hard to resolve the differences
One day, one of employees complained that windows were clean enough.
So they didn't want to clean windows.
But I thought differently. So I explained why we should clean windows.
When we cleaned, it was dawn. That's why It was hard to recognize if there was stains or not in lights.
when the sun rises, if we don't clean windows, we can easily find stains.
So it's better to unconditionally clean windows.
So one day, I showed the stains to him when the sun rises. And then I tried to talk with him again.
I could calm him down by objective verification and talk.
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Have a good day!~

Hello Venice.
When I speak English, I try to focus on making sentence in my mind.
So I miss thinking of focusing on my accent..
And my voice is originally small
But I will try to pronounce focusing my accent tomorrow.
Always Thank you.
There are questions below.
------------------------------
2:53 If you have more ( ), just kindly tell me.
-------------------------------------
Please correct this one. Thank you

I have worked for a cleaning company at pub in Brisbane, Australia.
At that time, I was a supervisor. I needed to manage workers.
Cleaning jobs require workers to be very precise.
Sometimes, it was hard to manage workers.
Because It was different between my precision and their precision
It's hard to resolve the differences
One day, one of employees complained that windows were clean enough.
So they didn't want to clean windows.
But I thought differently. So I explained why we should clean windows.
When we cleaned, it was dawn. That's why It was hard to recognize if there was stains or not in lights.
when the sun rises, if we don't clean windows, we can easily find stains.
So it's better to unconditionally clean windows.
So one day, I showed the stains to him when the sun rises. And then I tried to talk with him again.
I could calm him down by objective verification and talk.
-----------------------
Have a good day!~


Hello Venice.
When I speak English, I try to focus on making sentences in my mind.
So I miss thinking (of) about  focusing on my accent..
And my voice is originally small.
But I will try to (pronounce) focus (ing) on my accent tomorrow.
Always Thank you.
There( are) is a question (s) below.
------------------------------
2:53 If you still have more (to write ), just kindly tell me.
-------------------------------------
Please correct this one. Thank you

I have worked for a cleaning company at the pub in Brisbane, Australia.
At that time, I was a supervisor. I needed to manage workers.
Cleaning jobs require workers to be very precise.
Sometimes, it was hard to manage the workers.
It is because (It was different between) my precision (and) is different from their precisions.
It's hard to resolve the differences.
One day, one of the employees complained that the windows were cleaned enough.
So they didn't want to clean them (windows) anymore.
But I thought differently. So I explained why we should clean the windows.
When we cleaned them, it was dawn. That's why it was hard to recognize if there (was) were stains or not in lights.
When the sun rises, if we didn't clean the windows, we could easily find the stains.
So it's better to unconditionally clean them (windows.)
So one day, I showed the stains to him when the sun rises. And then I tried to talk (with) to him again.
I could calm him down by objective verification and talk.
-----------------------
Have a good day!~


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