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I wrote what I wanted to say below. Could you change this to correct one for me ?

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I have worked many kinds of part time job with colleagues in many different environments.
For instance, I have experience of working in factory as a production worker and even in Australia
I think I am willing to work with any people in any environment
Through these experience, I have been able to get a strong sense of responsibility, patience and cooperation.
These ability will help me work for your company.

In addition, My hobby is playing soccer.
Since I was young, I have played soccer.
I can say I am an outgoing person and used to doing something with people.

Besides, I don't hesitate to do something by myself as well.
I have some experience that prove my spirit of challenge.
I have ever been to Australia to have much experience.
I was always with foreign people when I stayed in home, worked, volunteered.
I always looked for a chance to meet foreign people.
I could learn how to understand their culture and thinking.
It was unforgettable memory.
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Thank you !!

I wrote what I wanted to say below. Could you change this to correct one for me ?

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I have worked many kinds of part time job with colleagues in many different environments.
For instance, I have experience of working in factory as a production worker and even in Australia
I think I am willing to work with any people in any environment
Through these experience, I have been able to get a strong sense of responsibility, patience and cooperation.
These ability will help me work for your company.

In addition, My hobby is playing soccer.
Since I was young, I have played soccer.
I can say I am an outgoing person and used to doing something with people.

Besides, I don't hesitate to do something by myself as well.
I have some experience that prove my spirit of challenge.
I have ever been to Australia to have much experience.
I was always with foreign people when I stayed in home, worked, volunteered.
I always looked for a chance to meet foreign people.
I could learn how to understand their culture and thinking.
It was unforgettable memory.
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Thank you !!


I wrote what I wanted to say below. Could you (change this to) correct this one for me?

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I have worked many kinds of part time jobs with my colleagues in many different environments.
For instance, I have experienced (of) working in a factory as a production worker and even in Australia.
I think I am willing to work with many people in any environment.
Through these experiences, I have been able to get a strong sense of responsibility, patience and cooperation.
These abilities will help me work effectively for your company.

In addition, my hobby is playing soccer.
Since I was young, I have played soccer.
I can say that I am an outgoing person and used to do (ing) something with people.

Besides, I don't hesitate to do something by myself as well.
I have some experiences that prove my spirit of challenge.
I have (ever) been to Australia to have much experience.
I was always with foreign people when I stayed (in) at home, worked, and volunteered.
I always looked for a chance to meet foreign people.
I could learn how to understand their culture and way of thinking.
It was an unforgettable memory.
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Thank you !!


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