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why we should exercise

Hi today I am going to tell you why we need to exercise.First reason is if we eat to much your healthy is not very good and we can be fat so if we eat many we need to exercise many times or you can eat not very much I mean you can eat middle.And second reason is if you eat too many calorie you can be sick and you can be very fat or you can go to hospital. Third reason is that if you don't exercise you cannot be strong if your friend touch you it will hurt because you didn't exercise and you are not healthy ,so you should exercise very well.Now this is the reason why you should exercise.Bye

Hi today I am going to tell you why we need to exercise.First reason is if we eat to much your healthy is not very good and we can be fat so if we eat many we need to exercise many times or you can eat not very much I mean you can eat middle.And second reason is if you eat too many calorie you can be sick and you can be very fat or you can go to hospital. Third reason is that if you don't exercise you cannot be strong if your friend touch you it will hurt because you didn't exercise and you are not healthy ,so you should exercise very well.Now this is the reason why you should exercise.Bye

 

Hi Yumin!

I think you submitted two compositions for the the same homework. Please double check that 

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Hi.Today I am going to tell you why we need to exercise.First reason ITHE FIRST REASON IS/FIRST, / FIRST OF ALL...s if we eat to much your healthy is

HEALTHY is an adjective I AM HEALTHY

HEALTH is a noun YOUR HEALTH IS IMPORTANT 

please note: 

not very good and we can be fat so if we eat many we

MANY is for COUNT NOUNS

MUCH is for NON COUNT NOUNS --- FOOD is a NON COUNT NOUN 

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