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I will event a rainbow day.

I want to event a weather.If I can create a new weather, I would make (Rainbow days).I will tell you about my rainbow weather.First Rainbow weather is created from me.I will tell you what can my rainbow weather can do cool things to my friends and family.First my rainbow can hold ad put me to the sky so I can eat the cloud.The clouds are water,because water evaporate then the water become gas then it forms a cloud.When the water many evaporate the cloud will send the water to ground and it forms bodies of water.When the cloud is sad,juice will come down to house to house.My rainbow can also be a playground example of slide,seesaw,swing.The rainbow can all the people happy.Example of no school weekend,we can play all day with friends or family and board games.My Rainbow weather also can help peoples.Like some need crops to live and save their family.Rainbow can help that to grow the crops.Rainbow sometimes make the sunlight and sometimes rainbow make rain come so the crops can grow very well.It can help many other people live,happy,come a good day.These is examples of my rainbow can do,but my rainbow weather can make people more happy.Rainbow have other special talents.I will tell more next time.Bye.

By: yumin
To:teacher

I want to event a weather.If I can create a new weather, I would make (Rainbow days).I will tell you about my rainbow weather.First Rainbow weather is created from me.I will tell you what can my rainbow weather can do cool things to my friends and family.First my rainbow can hold ad put me to the sky so I can eat the cloud.The clouds are water,because water evaporate then the water become gas then it forms a cloud.When the water many evaporate the cloud will send the water to ground and it forms bodies of water.When the cloud is sad,juice will come down to house to house.My rainbow can also be a playground example of slide,seesaw,swing.The rainbow can all the people happy.Example of no school weekend,we can play all day with friends or family and board games.My Rainbow weather also can help peoples.Like some need crops to live and save their family.Rainbow can help that to grow the crops.Rainbow sometimes make the sunlight and sometimes rainbow make rain come so the crops can grow very well.It can help many other people live,happy,come a good day.These is examples of my rainbow can do,but my rainbow weather can make people more happy.Rainbow have other special talents.I will tell more next time.Bye.

By: yumin
To:teacher

I want to event a weather.If I can create a new weather, I

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I want to event a weather.If I can create a new weather, I would like to make (Rainbow days).I will tell you about my rainbow weather.First Rainbow weather is created from me.I will tell you what can my rainbow weather can do cool things to my friends and family.

 

Rainbow can help that to grow the crops grow .Rainbow sometimes make the sunlight and sometimes rainbow make rain come so the crops can grow very well.It can help many other people live,happy,come a good day.

 

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Hi Yumin!

I like your story about your rainbow weather...soundsmagical...like a unicorn land haha ✨❤ 🦄 🦄 🦄 🦄

 


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