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My Summer

My summer was amazing!When I am hot I a drank juice with a ice.Yummy,then I asked my mom "Can I turn air conditioner mom?"My mom said okay since it's to hot.I sit in a chair and watch TV.Finally its last day of summer before summer goes I will play with summer by doing cool things that's so fun and cool.First I turn the air conditioner then ,I get a cool juice with ice and a orange cut into pieces.I was so cold.My mom said go outside and play with your friends.But I still want to have a summer but I also think I am to cold so I g outside and play with friends.

My summer was amazing!When I am hot I a drank juice with a ice.Yummy,then I asked my mom "Can I turn air conditioner mom?"My mom said okay since it's to hot.I sit in a chair and watch TV.Finally its last day of summer before summer goes I will play with summer by doing cool things that's so fun and cool.First I turn the air conditioner then ,I get a cool juice with ice and a orange cut into pieces.I was so cold.My mom said go outside and play with your friends.But I still want to have a summer but I also think I am to cold so I g outside and play with friends.

past simple
 
The most common tense for stories is the past simple. We use the past simple to talk about completed actions in the past.26 Jul 2017

When no one was looking, she opened the door


My LAST summer was amazing!When I WAS hot I a drank juice with a ice.Yummy,then I asked my mom "Can I turn air conditioner mom?"My mom said okay since it's  It was too hot.I sit SAT in a chair and watch WATCHED TV.Finally its WAS THE last day of summer before summer goes I will play with summer by doing cool things that's so fun and cool.First I turn the air conditioner then ,I get a cool juice with ice and a orange cut into pieces.I was so cold.My mom said go outside and play with your friends.But I still want to have a summer but I also think I am to cold so I g outside and play with friends.

 

This is nice Yumin you put more sentences in your story, more details means you put more effort and creativity


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