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Korea has tons of exciting beaches because it is a peninsula. I like to go to the beaches during the summer time(in the summer/ which is better?). One of my favorite beaches would have to be Hae woon Dae. It is in a coastal city called Busan which is my hometown. It is one of the most well known beaches in Korea.
Tell the truth, Personally I don't really enjoy swimming in the sea or doing intense water sports or activities. But I really like the atmosphere of looking at the beach in the fancy restaurant and eating delicious food while chatting with good people. This is the reason I want to go to the beautiful beach.
Anyway, Hae Woon Dae gets extremely crowded during the peak season. You can easily see the old and the young of Koreans and foreigners. Because there are tons of things to do and to see near the beach. So this is what my favorite domestic place looks like.


(Teacher, I want to use filler words in my sentences. But I don't know well where to insert the filler words is more nature and accurate. So, when you ammend my sentences, please use proper filler words in my sentences.)

          Korea has tons of exciting beaches because it is a peninsula. I like to go to  beaches in summer time.  One of my favorite  beaches is Hae woon Dae. It is in a coastal city called Busan which is my hometown. It is one of the most well knowned beach in Korea. To be honest,  I don't really enjoy swimming in the sea or doing intense water sports or activities. But I really like the atmosphere while looking at the beach and the ambiance in a fancy restaurant and eating sumptious food while chatting with friends. This is the reason I want to go to a beautiful beach.


 Hae Woon Dae gets extremely crowded during the peak season. You can  see different people both Koreans as well as foreigners. There are tons of things to do and to witness near the beach, and this is how  my favorite domestic tourists spot looks like ... very fascinating and jaw dropping place.



(Teacher, I want to use filler words in my sentences. But I don't know well where to insert the filler words is more nature and accurate. So, when you ammend my sentences, please use proper filler words in my sentences.)


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