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My favorite sports

1.My favorite sports is dodgeball.
2.Dodgeball is fun.
3.I played dodgeball in school.
4.I threw the dodgeball.
5.Hit the other team's student was difficult.
6.I want to play dodgeball again.
7.But I transfer to another school.
8.And I can't go to school because of the corona virus.
9.I haven't play dodgeball over 1 year.
10.I hope to play dodgeball someday.
11.I also like baseball and ping-pong.
12.I like to play baseball with my dad.
13.My dad threw a ball,and I hit it.
14.But my dad and I can't go out thesedays.
15.Because I have too much math homeworks.
16.I also like to play ping-pong with my dad.
17.I can play ping-pong.
18.But my dad and I can't go out to play ping-pong.
19.Because there is no ping-pong court in this town.
20.I am so sad...

1. My favorite sport is dodgeball.
2. Dodgeball is fun.
3. I play dodgeball in school.
4. I throw the dodgeball.
5. Hitting the other team is difficult.
6. I want to play dodgeball again.
7. But I transferred to another school.
8. And I can't go to school because of the corona virus.
9. I haven't played dodgeball for over a  year.
10.I hope to play dodgeball someday.
11.I also like baseball and ping-pong.
12.I like to play baseball with my dad.
13. My dad throws the ball and I hit it.
14. But my dad and I can't go out these days.
15. Because I have too much (a lot of) math homeworks.
16.I also like to play ping-pong with my dad.
17. I can play ping-pong.
18. But my dad and I can't go out to play ping-pong.
19. Because there is no ping-pong court in this town.
20. I am so sad...

 

Hello, Ruby! 

         I hope you can play again soon. You have minimal lapses on your writing, however when writing a composition try to do it paragraph form like this;

         My favorite sport is dodgeball. It is fun and I play it in school. I throw the dodgeball, but hitting other team's players is difficult. I want to play dodgeball again, but I transfered to another school and I go to school because of Corona virus. I haven't played dodgeball for over a year. I hope I can play dodgeball again someday. 

         I also like baseball and pingpong. I like to play baseball with my dad. My dad throws the ball and I hit it, but my dad and I can't go these days because I have a lot of math homework. I also like to play pingpong with my dad, but we can't go out to play because there isn't any pingpong court in this town. I am so sad.


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