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Hi teacher
finally its monday
in last weekends, i met friends who didt see each other during a long time
we drunk until at 3 a.m
so next day i spent whole of day for sleeping ...
I really dont like to spend much time for just sleeping but this day i feel my body is getting weak
whenever i dont have enought sleep i cant act nomarlly
Is it beacuse i m get to be worker like most of korea father?
For this reason, i think i have to excersice regularly and care my body more carfully this day
How about you? do you have any concern this day?
anyway see you after 20 min :D

 

Hi teacher

finally its monday 

Finally, it’s Monday! (Please consider Punctuation marks and Capitalization)


in last weekends, i met friends who didt see each other during a long time

Last weekend, I met friends whom I didn’t able to be with for quite some time now.

(Please read on how you can use “whom” instead of “who”: http://www.grammarbook.com/grammar/whoVwhom.asp )

 

we drunk until at 3 a.m

We drank until 3 am. (“Drunk” is an adjective, for example: I smelled his breathe, and I can conclude that he was drunk. While “Drank” is a verb or action work and it’s the simple past tense of “Drink”. )

so next day i spent whole of day for sleeping ...

So on the next day, I spent the whole day sleeping.

                    
I really dont like to spend much time for just sleeping but this day i feel my body is getting weak

I didn’t really like to spend much of my time just sleeping, but I was really feeling weak that day.

(Please be mindful of your tenses of verb, you can always review the notes I gave you about Tenses of Verbs.)


whenever i dont have enought sleep i cant act nomarlly 

Whenever I don’t get enough of sleep, I couldn’t act as normal as usual.


Is it beacuse i m get to be worker like most of korea father?

(I’m sorry but I don’t understand what you mean by this sentence.)

 


For this reason, i think i have to excersice regularly and care my body more carfully this day 

For this reason, I think I have to exercise regularly and take care of my body more this day.

(You should always watch out for redundancy of words. Or those words which you repeated twice or more in one sentence. In your sentence you already used the word care and you still used carefully, you must consider other term or word.)


How about you? do you have any concern this day?

How about you, do you have any concerns today?

 

anyway see you after 20 min :D

Anyway, see you after 20 mins.


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