영작교정
목록
완료

Monday

Hi teacher
finally its monday
in last weekends, i met friends who didt see each other during a long time
we drunk until at 3 a.m
so next day i spent whole of day for sleeping ...
I really dont like to spend much time for just sleeping but this day i feel my body is getting weak
whenever i dont have enought sleep i cant act nomarlly
Is it beacuse i m get to be worker like most of korea father?
For this reason, i think i have to excersice regularly and care my body more carfully this day
How about you? do you have any concern this day?
anyway see you after 20 min :D

 

Hi teacher

finally its monday 

Finally, it’s Monday! (Please consider Punctuation marks and Capitalization)


in last weekends, i met friends who didt see each other during a long time

Last weekend, I met friends whom I didn’t able to be with for quite some time now.

(Please read on how you can use “whom” instead of “who”: http://www.grammarbook.com/grammar/whoVwhom.asp )

 

we drunk until at 3 a.m

We drank until 3 am. (“Drunk” is an adjective, for example: I smelled his breathe, and I can conclude that he was drunk. While “Drank” is a verb or action work and it’s the simple past tense of “Drink”. )

so next day i spent whole of day for sleeping ...

So on the next day, I spent the whole day sleeping.

                    
I really dont like to spend much time for just sleeping but this day i feel my body is getting weak

I didn’t really like to spend much of my time just sleeping, but I was really feeling weak that day.

(Please be mindful of your tenses of verb, you can always review the notes I gave you about Tenses of Verbs.)


whenever i dont have enought sleep i cant act nomarlly 

Whenever I don’t get enough of sleep, I couldn’t act as normal as usual.


Is it beacuse i m get to be worker like most of korea father?

(I’m sorry but I don’t understand what you mean by this sentence.)

 


For this reason, i think i have to excersice regularly and care my body more carfully this day 

For this reason, I think I have to exercise regularly and take care of my body more this day.

(You should always watch out for redundancy of words. Or those words which you repeated twice or more in one sentence. In your sentence you already used the word care and you still used carefully, you must consider other term or word.)


How about you? do you have any concern this day?

How about you, do you have any concerns today?

 

anyway see you after 20 min :D

Anyway, see you after 20 mins.


수강정보
필리핀 전화영어 주 3회 10분 4주
교재
Speak Your Mind 1 (Senior Course)
[시니어] 프리토킹
번호
제목
작성자
튜터
작성일
392
완료
[4번째 영작 첨삭] Hi maribel
amber kim
Maribel
2016.07.29
391
완료
[3번째 영작 첨삭] Hi
Kim Hyun Jeong
-
2016.07.28
390
완료
[3번째 영작 첨삭] hi maribel
amber kim
Maribel
2016.07.27
389
완료
[2번째 영작 첨삭] diary
Kim Hyun Jeong
-
2016.07.27
388
완료
[2번째 영작 첨삭] Hi , maribel
amber kim
Maribel
2016.07.24
387
완료
[1번째 영작 첨삭] Hi
Lina Yi
-
2016.07.22
386
완료
[1번째 영작 첨삭] hi, maribel
amber kim
Maribel
2016.07.21
385
완료
[1번째 영작 첨삭] HI!
Kim Hyun Jeong
-
2016.07.21
384
완료
[2번째 영작 첨삭] essay
Jang,Hye-ran
-
2016.07.10
383
완료
[1번째 영작 첨삭] Essay
leah
-
2016.07.08
382
완료
[1번째 영작 첨삭] hello
Jang,Hye-ran
-
2016.07.06
381
완료
[2번째 영작 첨삭] Please review my writing - continued from my previous message
joohyun
Maribel
2016.06.23
380
완료
[1번째 영작 첨삭] Please review my writing 01
joohyun
Maribel
2016.06.23
379
접수
[1번째 영작 첨삭] job
hyeri go
-
2016.06.08
378
완료
[1번째 영작 첨삭] Please fix this e-mail.
David
-
2016.04.29
377
완료
[1번째 영작 첨삭] Self Intrroduction
Hong Myung Heon
-
2016.04.18
376
완료
[2번째 영작 첨삭] interview question#2
Jamie
Maritess"
2016.04.06
375
완료
[1번째 영작 첨삭] 일기
lee eun young
Maritess"
2016.03.23
374
완료
[1번째 영작 첨삭] interview question#1
Jamie
-
2016.03.12
373
완료
[1번째 영작 첨삭] diary
celina
Maribel
2016.03.08

초대한 친구가 수업을 등록하면
무료 수업 1회를 드려요!

무료 수업 1회
초대한 친구가 회원 가입 및 수강권 결제 후 수업을 등록하면
두 사람 모두 무료 수업 1회 수강권을 받아요!
Step 01. 조이영어로 친구를 초대해 보세요!
https://joy05.co.kr
Step 02. 인증하기
초대한 친구가 수업 등록을 완료하면, 고객센터로 수업을 등록한 친구의 '아이디' 또는 '이름 + 휴대폰 번호 뒷자리'를 남겨주세요!
*자녀 혹은 학부모 이름으로 가입하신 경우, 실제 회원가입하신 수강생 이름으로 적어주세요!
Ex. 친구 아이디: joy5205 / 친구 이름: 김조이, 9876
Step 03. 혜택받기
고객센터를 통해 인증하신 내용이 확인되면, 혜택을 적용해드립니다!

Zoom 화상수업 가이드

1. Zoom 설치하기
아래 링크에 접속하여 Zoom 프로그램을 설치합니다.
2. 수강실 입장하기
1) 조이영어 홈페이지 로그인 후 강의실에서 [수강실 입장] 버튼을 클릭해주세요.
2) 버튼을 누르고 Zoom 프로그램 열기 허용 → 컴퓨터 오디오로 참가를 누르면 튜터와 연결됩니다.
3. Zoom 이용에 다른 문의사항이 있으신가요?
조이영어 학습매니저에게 연락주시면 수업에 관련된 문의사항을 친절히 상담해드리겠습니다.
  • 카카오톡 상담 채널 : @조이영어
  • 조이영어 고객센터 : 1899-8695 (운영시간 : 월~금 9:00~17:30)

이용약관

개인정보취급방침