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How did English change your life?

From middle school, English was a mandatory subject which I couldn't choose to study myself so I didn't like to study English when I was young. However, after becoming an university student, I realized I can't avoid studying English in my whole life.
Since at that moment, I studied English harder than any moment in my life, and then it changed my life a lot.

At first, I dreamed to study abroad. My first trip to go abroad was when I was freshman. I was so afriad to talk with someone in English, even in Australia. After I came back, I needed to make some goals to study English. Studying abroad was the main goal to learn English and I achieved this dream.

Secondly, I am not afraid to go abroad myself anymore. I am not perfect in Enlgish yet, but at least, I am not avoiding talking with someone in English. I can explain what I want and ask what I wonder, so I love to go abroad for relaxing or enjoying other cultures.

If I still don't like to study Enlgish so just avoid it, maybe I would not dream to be an overseas student and make any plan for trip in other country. I could learn how other countries are different and I need to study a great deal of subjects more.

From middle school, English was a mandatory subject which I couldn't choose to study myself so I didn't like to study English when I was young. However, after becoming an university student, I realized I can't avoid studying English in my whole life.
Since at that moment, I studied English harder than any moment in my life, and then it changed my life a lot.

At first, I dreamed to study abroad. My first trip to go abroad was when I was freshman. I was so afriad to talk with someone in English, even in Australia. After I came back, I needed to make some goals to study English. Studying abroad was the main goal to learn English and I achieved this dream.

Secondly, I am not afraid to go abroad myself anymore. I am not perfect in Enlgish yet, but at least, I am not avoiding talking with someone in English. I can explain what I want and ask what I wonder, so I love to go abroad for relaxing or enjoying other cultures.

If I still don't like to study Enlgish so just avoid it, maybe I would not dream to be an overseas student and make any plan for trip in other country. I could learn how other countries are different and I need to study a great deal of subjects more.


From middle school, English was a mandatory subject which I couldn't (choose to study myself) resist (so I didn't like to study English when I was young.) However, after becoming a (n) university student, I realized I (can't) couldn’t avoid studying English in my whole life. Since at that moment, I studied English harder (than any moment in my life,) and then it changed my life a lot.

At first, I dreamed (to)
of studying abroad. (My first trip to go abroad) The first time I traveled abroad was when I was a freshman. I was so afraid to talk with someone in English, even in Australia. After I came back, I needed to make some goals (to) about studying (English) it. Studying abroad was (the) my main goal (to) of learning (English) the international language and I achieved (this) that dream.

Secondly, I am not afraid to go abroad
by myself anymore. I am not perfect in usingEnglish yet, but at least, I am not avoiding talking (with) to someone (in English) anymore. I can explain what I want and ask what I wonder, so I love to go abroad for relaxing or enjoying other cultures.

If I (still don't like to study English so just avoid it,)
avoided studying the global language, maybe I would not dream (to)of becoming an overseas student and make any plans (for trip) of traveling in other countries. I (could) can learn how other countries are different and I need to study a great deal of subjects more.

 
Redundancy of words should be omitted. You should widen your widen your vocabulary Sunny.
I know you can do more. But overall, you did a very good job! ~

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