Money

I don't receive allowance.
When I receive allowance, I want to buy iPad.
Because I can study English and do many things.
My friends have Nintendo game console.
But, game is bad for our health and eyes.
I think I just sometime do game on phone.
I don't receive allowance, but now is happy!

         I don't receive any allowance, but when I receive it, I want to but an iPad, so I can study English and do many things. My friends have Nintendo game console, but playing games is bad for our health, especially for our eyes. I think I will just sometimes play games on my phone. I don't receive any allowance, but I feel happy now!

 

Hello, Min!

       You are very understanding. I think your parents are proud of you. Anyway, kindly check the corrections that I made on your composition.

       Well done!

 

Kath :)