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my story:my toy play

character:Crong,Petty, Pororo,Poby,Eddie,Roddy,Rupee
Pororo have passport
Crong,Petty,Poby, have passport too
so thay go to train the train France leaves before 9 in the evening and than pororo see the pocket But there not have passport
But inside not passport gold key so Pororo tall Crong,Petty,Poby than Crong say"it Curiouser maybe Thief you know what??
Gentleman thief Took 5.000 shillings from the Bank!!!!!!! l thing the thief took your passport !!!!!!!!! Petty"than why Pororo have
gold key? is not thief! l thing someone change with Pororo Pororo is gave passport and that Person get gold key Poby"is not! how Pororo change with gold key? is it nonsense and do you have any evidence Petty'no is right!!!! Pororo"hey Petty,Poby fight overe!"
'France France~~~~'and thay out of train and Crong,Petty, Pororo,Poby"Curiouser and Curiouser!" France is different than a long dark room with dooors all round the walls appeared in front of Crong,Petty, Pororo,Poby thay all locked and than Pororov thing gold key so opened one of the door inside Gentleman thief conversation Gentleman thief name Eddie,Roddy
Eddie"is too diffcult!!!!!!!!!"
Eddie is so annoyed
Roddy saw the Crong,Petty, Pororo,Poby
Roddy"who are you!"
Poby'Explain yourself!"
Eddie,Roddy"we are Gentleman thief!! we are punish you!!"
Crong,Petty, Pororo,Poby became servants
oneday Crong heard of the Ceiling
Crong"hayGuys do you heard anything?"
Petty, Pororo,Poby"we are nothing to heard"
so Crong go Ceiling inside goddess Rupee Sleep

character:Crong,Petty, Pororo,Poby,Eddie,Roddy,Rupee
Pororo has a passport.
Crong, Petty, Poby, have passports too.
So, they go to train station to ride the train in going to France. It leaves before 9 in the evening and then pororo saw his pocket without his passport on it.
Inside his pocket was only a gold key so Pororo tell Crong, Petty, Poby. Then, Crong said curiously, maybe there's a thief, what do you think??
A gentleman thief Took 5.000 shillings from the Bank!!!!!!! l think the thief took your passport !!!!!!!!! Petty said, then why did Pororo has a 
gold key? He is not thief! l think someone is setting Pororo. Pororo's passport in exchange to get the gold key. It's not Poby!  How did Pororo change it with a gold key? It's nonsense and do you have any evidence Petty?? It's not right to accuse someone without any evidence! Pororo, Petty, Poby were fighting over it!"
In France~~~~'and they're out of the train and Crong,Petty, Pororo,Poby were all curious! France is different in a long dark room with doors all round the walls appeared in front of Crong, Petty, Pororo, Poby and they all been locked up and then Pororo has the gold key so they eventually opened one of the door inside. Here's the Gentleman thief conversation. The Gentleman thief named Eddie and Roddy.
Eddie, it's too diffcult!!!!!!!!!"
Eddie is so annoyed.
Roddy saw Crong,Petty, Pororo,Poby.
Roddy, who are you!"
Poby, Explain yourself!"
Eddie,Roddy: we are Gentleman thief!! We will punish you!!"
Crong,Petty, Pororo,Poby became servants.
One day, Crong heard something from the ceiling.
Crong: hey guys, have you heard anything?"
Petty, Pororo,Poby" we heard nothing"
so Crong went to the ceiling and he saw the goddess Rupee feel asleep.


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