I took Mocha and Latte. It was the very first time for them to try to swim in their entire lives. I was the only one who enjoyed it. They were afraid of water and didn't get closer to it. We tried to entice them with what they like. We were shaking the snacks with our hands standing near the water. But they didn't come to me. Finally, my boy friend just took one and put him right into the water. They were very good swimmer. Actually it's their instinct as long as l Known. They did it very well but not enjoy it at all. I was the only one who loves seeing them swimming. Probably they will love it too as they get used to it.
1. Last week from Wednesday to Sunday was the longest Korean holidays called Chu-seok.
Correction: Last week, from Wednesday until Sunday we were celebrating one of the longest Korean holidays which was called Chu-seok.
2. I spent most of my time staying at home except for Saturday.
Correction: I spent most of my time staying at home except on Saturday.
3. [Correct] I went to a swimming pool for dogs.
4. It's a kind of play ground for dogs that includes a swimming pool and cafeteria.
Correction: It's a kind of playgrounds for dogs that includes a swimming pool and a cafeteria.
5. I took Mocha and Latte.
Correction: I took Mocha and Latte there.
6. It was the very first time for them to try to swim in their entire lives.
Correction: It was the very first time their entire lives to try swimming.
7. I was the only one who enjoyed it.
Correction: I was the one who enjoyed it the most.
8. They were afraid of water and didn't get closer to it.
Correction: They were very afraid of water and didn't stay there for a long time.
9. [Correct] We tried to entice them with what they like.
10. We were shaking the snacks with our hands standing near the water.
Correction: We were shaking the treats with our hands while standin near the water.
11. [Correct] But they didn't come to me.
12. Finally, my boy friend just took one and put him right into the water.
Correction: Finally, my boyfriend took one of them and put them straight into the water.
13. They were very good swimmer.
Correction: They were very good swimmers.
14. Actually it's their instinct as long as l Known.
Correction: If I'm not mistaken, it was their natural instinct.
15. They did it very well but not enjoy it at all.
Correction: They did it very well but didn't enjoy it at all.
16. I was the only one who loves seeing them swimming.
Correction: I loved it very much seeing them swimming.
17. Probably they will love it too as they get used to it.
Correction: They will probably love it too when they get used to it.
