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Compared to the past, my situation is changed a lot. First, I moved to the Netherlands to live a better life. I don't know living in the Netherlands is better than Korea but I could have inner peace in here. Besides, I quit my job to move to a foreign country. It was obvious that I didn't want to keep working this job. However, I have to do my best to hunt another job in the Netherlands now. It will be harder than Korea I guess. Last, I started to do more things by myself. When I was in Korea, my family did so many works instead of me. For example, I used to get food from my mother so I didn't have to cook. Sometimes, I miss that time but I know that I should learn all of the things for my future cause life is living alone. I try to adjust these changes in my life.

Compared to the past, my situation is changed a lot.

>>Compared to the past, my situation has changed a lot.


First, I moved to the Netherlands to live a better life.

>> no error


I don't know living in the Netherlands is better than Korea but I could have inner peace in here.

>>I don't know if living in the Netherlands is better than Korea, but I found inner peace here.


Besides, I quit my job to move to a foreign country.

>> no error


It was obvious that I didn't want to keep working this job.

>>It is obvious that I didn't want to keep my job.


However, I have to do my best to hunt another job in the Netherlands now.

>>However, I have to do my best to hunt for another job in the Netherlands now.


It will be harder than Korea I guess.

>>It will be harder than in Korea I guess.


Last, I started to do more things by myself.

>>Lastly, I started doing things by myself.


When I was in Korea, my family did so many works instead of me.

>>When I was in Korea, my family did all the housework instead of me.


For example, I used to get food from my mother so I didn't have to cook.

>> no error


Sometimes, I miss that time but I know that I should learn all of the things for my future cause life is living alone.

>>Sometimes I miss that time, but I know that I should learn all of this for my future because I'm already living independently.


I try to adjust these changes in my life.

>>I'm still trying to adjust to these changes in my life.


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