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The writer thinks nusing a baby in public places is a natural act and nothing wrong this situdation. I can see this from his writing, especailly the words LOONY PEOPLE and GOOd GRIEF!. The writer called loony people who are disgusted at that behavior. The word, loony means crazy / selfish. However, I don't think they are loony people like crazy or selfish because people have a different point of view and thoughts. Depends on their situation it can be changed. For example, now I don't think I can breast-feed my baby in public even he is crying for milk, because I am not married and I don't have any childs. At the moment I don't understand the people who nurse the babies in the public. However, maybe if I get married and have a baby, my mind can be changed and one day I can be the one who nurse the babies in public places. I want my child to be breast-feed instead of just milk-feed. I think breast-feed is really important and it can help the babies grows healthy. Even though I am going to be a mother who is doing breast-feed, ifI see the woman who is breast-feeding in the presence of others, It is little obscene to me.

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The writer thinks nusing a baby in public places is a natural act and nothing wrong this situdation. I can see this from his writing, especailly the words LOONY PEOPLE and GOOd GRIEF!. The writer called loony people who are disgusted at that behavior. The word, loony means crazy / selfish. However, I don't think they are loony people like crazy or selfish because people have a different point of view and thoughts. Depends on their situation it can be changed. For example, now I don't think I can breast-feed my baby in public even he is crying for milk, because I am not married and I don't have any childs. At the moment I don't understand the people who nurse the babies in the public. However, maybe if I get married and have a baby, my mind can be changed and one day I can be the one who nurse the babies in public places. I want my child to be breast-feed instead of just milk-feed. I think breast-feed is really important and it can help the babies grows healthy. Even though I am going to be a mother who is doing breast-feed, ifI see the woman who is breast-feeding in the presence of others, It is little obscene to me.

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The writer thinks nursing a baby in public places is a natural act and nothing is wrong with this situation. I can see this from his writing, especially the words LOONY PEOPLE and GOOD GRIEF! The writer called people who are disgusted at that behavior loony. The word loony means crazy or selfish. However, I don't think they are loony people because people have different point of views and thoughts. It depends on their situation, and it changes. For example, I don't think I can breastfeed my baby in public even though he's crying for milk because I am not married and I don't have any children. At the moment, I don't understand the people who nurse the babies in public. However, maybe if I get married and have a baby, my mind will change and one day I will be the one who nurse the babies in public places. I want my child to be breastfed instead of feeding them formulated milk. I think breastfeeding is really important and it can help the babies grow healthy. Even though I'm going to be a mother who's going to breastfeed I still find women breastfeeding in the presence of other people obscene.  


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