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Fool bird story and my Perspective of it

Do you know fool bird story? Maybe you don’t know because it’s not right title it’s just my thought. The right name is “Heungbu and Nolbu”. This is a short version of story read it please, one day older brother Nolbu kick out Heungbu why is he don’t earn money and always do kind things. And Heungbu begged for eat after he tried to work but his family still cannot eat. And one day they take care of sick bird and bird give them a fruit. In the fruit there are gold, money and foods. If you just heard this you will think Heungbu is just really poor guy. But in real he is not responsible men. In one sentence in book it say ‘Heungbu has 25 children and he always give money to other persons and don’t care of his family. He is kind but not good father if he cannot take care of child he should not have them, he also said he is get board to hearing “dad food!” From his child. So that’s why I asking bird why you give him good things. And maybe the bird see just one part of him. Next time please! Bird! Don’t see just one part of person!

Do you know fool bird story?

- Do you know the fool bird story?

Maybe you don’t know because it’s not right title it’s just my thought.

- Maybe you don't know because it's not the right title. I just thought of it.

The right name is “Heungbu and Nolbu”.

- The correct title is Heungbu and Nolbu'."

This is a short version of story read it please,

- This is the summary of the story. Read it pleae. 

one day older brother Nolbu kick out Heungbu why is he don’t earn money and always do kind things.

- One day, Nolbu, the older brother, kicked Heungbu out because he couldn't earn money and would always do kind things.  

And Heungbu begged for eat after he tried to work but his family still cannot eat.

- Heungbu begged to eat after trying to work but his family couldn't eat. 

And one day they take care of sick bird and bird give them a fruit. In the fruit there are gold, money and foods.

- One day, they took care of a sick bird and it gave them a fruit. Indise the fruit, there were gold, money, and foods.

If you just heard this you will think Heungbu is just really poor guy.

- If this is your first time to hear about  Heungbu, you would think that he's just a really poor guy. 

But in real he is not responsible men.

- But in reality he's not a responsible man.  

In one sentence in book it say ‘Heungbu has 25 children and he always give money to other persons and don’t care of his family.

- There's a part in the book that said that he had 25 children. He would always give money to other people but didn't care for his family.

He is kind but not good father if he cannot take care of child he should not have them,

- He was kind but not a good father. If he couldn't take care of his children he should've not have them.

he also said he is get board to hearing “dad food!” From his child.

- He also said that he's bored of hearing "Dad, food" from his children.

So that’s why I asking bird why you give him good things.

- That's why I wonder why the bird gave him good things. 

And maybe the bird see just one part of him.

- Maybe the bird saw just one part of him.

Next time please! Bird! Don’t see just one part of person!

- Next time, bird, please don't just look at the good side of a person.  

 


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