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IELTS TASK 1.

The chart shows local government expenditure from 2010 to 2015.
The biggest expenditure was education both in 2010 and in 2015. However, the percentage of education expenditure decreased from 24% in 2010 to 21% in 2015. Compared to 2010 figures, the percentage of healthcare and defense also declined in 2015. The percentage of healthcare changed from 21% to 20 % and the percentage of defense also represented 14% in 2015 whereas it was remarked 17% in 2010.
On the other hand, the government increased welfare, interest on borrowing, transport, and culture and leisure between 2010 and 2015. The percentage of welfare and interest on borrowing significantly inclined compared to other data parts. Both were increased from 8% and 5% in 2010 to 13% and 10% in 2015. Compared to this high increase rate, transport and culture and leisure were slightly inclined in 2015. The percentage of transport increased from 1% in 2010 to 3% in 2015 and the percentage of culture and leisure increased from 1% in 2010 to 2% in 2015.
The percentage of pensions and other maintained the same rate both 2010 and 2015.
To sum up, the government reduced expenditure of education, healthcare, defense but the percentage of welfare, interest on borrowing, transport, and culture and leisure extended.

The chart shows local government expenditure from 2010 to 2015.
The biggest expenditure was education both in 2010 and in 2015. However, the percentage of education expenditure decreased from 24% in 2010 to 21% in 2015. Compared to 2010 figures, the percentage of healthcare and defense also declined in 2015. The percentage of healthcare changed from 21% to 20 % and the percentage of defense also represented 14% in 2015 whereas it was remarked 17% in 2010.
On the other hand, the government increased welfare, interest on borrowing, transport, and culture and leisure between 2010 and 2015. The percentage of welfare and interest on borrowing significantly inclined compared to other data parts. Both were increased from 8% and 5% in 2010 to 13% and 10% in 2015. Compared to this high increase rate, transport and culture and leisure were slightly inclined in 2015. The percentage of transport increased from 1% in 2010 to 3% in 2015 and the percentage of culture and leisure increased from 1% in 2010 to 2% in 2015.
The percentage of pensions and other maintained the same rate both 2010 and 2015.
To sum up, the government reduced expenditure of education, healthcare, defense but the percentage of welfare, interest on borrowing, transport, and culture and leisure extended.


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