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A lot of holiday in May South Korea.

It's been a while from the last class. I put the class off becasue there wre a lot of holiday and aniversaries in May. Employee day in May 1st, Kids day on 5th. Parents day in 8th. Teachers day in May 17th.
Anyway, I've been go out to visit and ride the luge in kanwah near from Seoul. It is relevatly brand new activity. I've been riddden 1 year ago during workshop with my company colleages. I want to introduce this brand new luge to my son and wife. Ah, this rusy is totally different with the actual rusy in the winter olymphic. People ride on a sled with wheel not knife and it works on just road on the mountain not ice.
So, we should go up to the top of the hill, not walking, by cable car very easily. On the top of the hill, there are gorgeous seesight including the sea.
We have incredablly present time with this interesting rusy, clean air and magnificient seesight.

It's been a while from the my last class. I put the class off the class on hold becasue because there wre were a lot of holidays and aniversaries anniversaries in May such as Employee Labor day in May 1st, Kids day on 5th. Parents day in 8th. Teachers day in May 17th.
Anyway, I've been go gone out to visit and ride ridden the  a luge in kanwah Kanwah near from Seoul. It is relevatly  relevantly brand new activity. I've been riddden ridden luge 1  a year ago during workshop with my company colleages colleagues . I want to introduce this brand new luge   new outdoor activity to my son and wife. Ah, this rusy is totally different with the actual rusy in the winter olymphic. People ride on a sled with wheel not knife and it works on just road on the mountain not ice.
So, we should go up to the top of the hill, not by walking,  but by cable car very easily. On the top of the hill From there, there are gorgeous seesight  view including the sea can be seen.
We have incredablly an incredible present time with this interesting rusy   outdoor activity with clean air and magnificient seesight scenery.

 

NOTE: The last sentence is confusing. There must be another idea you intend to convey. Nonetheless, corrections were made as what I see fit. 


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