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How do you relieve your stress?

How do you relieve your stress?

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First,
I can take a weigh off my mind by watching some dramas back to back at home after work during the weekdays.
That way, I can forget about my worries and stress soaking and immersed in their stories.
Secondly,
I sometimes go clubbing with my friends in Suwon or Seoul city.
I am into hip-pop music so it makes me get up and dance to the upbeat music at clubs drinking cocktails and mixed orange vodca.
The atmosphere is full of energy and excitement and it is like another new world underground.
I can tell that it defintely takes my frustrations out by painting the town red.
Lastly, I often go on a trip so that I can refresh myself and get back into the swing of things.
I think traveling is one of the good ways to get rid of our stress.

How do Do you You relieve Relieve your stress Stress?

●●●Plz Please use capital letters or colors on letters which are corrected.

First,
I can take a weigh off my mind by watching some dramas back to back at home after work during the weekdays.
During weekdays, watching dramas at home is one of my ways to weigh off my mind.
That way, I can forget about my worries and stress soaking and immersed in their stories.
That way, I can forget about my worries and stress especially when I am engrossed in the plot.
Secondly,   Another way of releasing stress is that I, sometimes go clubbing at Suwon or Seoul City with my friends.
I sometimes go clubbing with my friends in Suwon or Seoul city.
I am into hip-pop music so it makes me get up and dance to the upbeat music at clubs drinking cocktails and mixed orange vodca.
I am into hip-hop music, and as upbeat music plays that just makes me dance at clubs. I also enjoy some cocktail glasses and mixed vodkas. 
The atmosphere is full of energy and excitement and it is like another new world underground.
The atmosphere is exhuberant and it feels to be like I am in a new world. 
I can tell that it defintely takes my frustrations out by painting the town red.(CORRECT)
Lastly, I often go on a trip so that I can refresh myself and get back into the swing of things.
Lastly, I often go on a trip to refresh myself and quickly get into the swing of things.
I think traveling is one of the good ways to get rid of our stress.
I think travelling is one of the better ways to get rid of stress.


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