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Last Friday, I postponed my English class.
When I’m getting of work, I answered from my brother.
“ I can’t see anything, please come to my dormitory right now. ”
I surprised to hear that , After I went to Seoul with my father.
It was traffic jam because of rush hour. lt took about on double time

I went to Emergency with my brother and he was a various of examined.
Doctor said to me “ It is conjunctivitis.”
It is a temporily symptom so, you should take a enough rest and take a medicine.

After we came back home, he took a rest and medicine.
Now it is better than before.
I think that why this situation happened, he works and plays game using computer everyday.

Last Friday, I postponed my English class.
When I’m getting of work, I answered from my brother.
“ I can’t see anything, please come to my dormitory right now. ”
I surprised to hear that , After I went to Seoul with my father.
It was traffic jam because of rush hour. lt took about on double time

I went to Emergency with my brother and he was a various of examined.
Doctor said to me “ It is conjunctivitis.”
It is a temporily symptom so, you should take a enough rest and take a medicine.

After we came back home, he took a rest and medicine.
Now it is better than before.
I think that why this situation happened, he works and plays game using computer everyday.

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Last Friday, I postponed my English class. 

When I’m getting off to work, I answered a call from my brother.

“ I can’t see anything, please come to my dormitory right now. ” 

I was surprised to hear that. After I went to Seoul with my father. It was a traffic jam because of rush hour. lt took about double time.

I went to Emergency with my brother and he did a variety of examinations. 

The doctor said to me “ It is conjunctivitis.”

It is a temporary symptom so, you should take enough rest and take medicine. 

After we came back home, he took a rest and medicine. 

Now it is better than before.

I think that's why this situation happened, he works and plays a game using a computer every day.


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