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I have plan for my summer vacation with my family.
we are going to New York State.
My sister-in-law is studying there, so we try to go there.

I want to let my daughter experience English speaking country.
It is important to experience culture in learning English.
I think it would be good for the child to order meals or say hello to people in English by herself
Therefore I want to go abroad often with my child if I can.
I need time and money for it.
I have saved money and my vacation.

Nowadays there is a big problem that the corona virus is occurring in the USA and increasing rapidly in Europe
I hope the corona virus disappear when we go to USA

           I have planned my summer vacation with my family. We are going to New York. My sister-in-law is studying there, so we will try to go there and visit her. 

           I want to let my daughter experience going to an English speaking country, because it is important to experience culture in learning the English language. I think it would be for a child to order meals or say hello to people in English by herself. Therefore, I want to go abroad with my child if I can. I need time and money to make it happen and I have saved money for our vacation. Unfortunately, USA is currently facing a big problem and that is the Corona virus and it is spreading rapidly in the USA and Europe. I hope the Corona virus will disappear, when we go to the USA.

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         Hi! Your daughter is lucky to have you as her parent. You know well that learning isn't just in the four corners of the classroom in school, but it can also be found outside. Letting your daughter experience different cultures, so she will learn the English language is going to be really effective. She can practice her speaking skills and her confidence through that. I hope the Corona virus pandemic will be over, so we can go back to our normal lives without fear of being infected, and you can also go to the USA as you planned. I am hoping for everything to be okay. 

       With regards to your writing, it is much better to write in paragraph form. See the format of my correction for your writing. You can also add words that can make your writing more interesting.

 

- KATH 


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