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I am determined to get up at 5 A.M every day.
so I try to do
For the first 5 days. it was not so hard to get up. but after that, it was getting harder for me.
Maybe I was getting tired. The fatigue was piled up.
But. I will keep trying it for my future.
This time in the morning is the only free time for me.


These days the divorce is more popular than before.
Maybe, people think that their own life is the most important than anything else.
In other words, people value their happiness rather than sacrifice to their family.
So the divorce becomes more tolerent to people.
But it's beyond a doubt that the child will be hurt.
The divorce is a personal choice to be chosen carefully in a social point of view.

I was a very active kid in my childhood.
I fell down while hanging on a iron bar.
When I tried to cook ramen, I poured hot water on my feet.
My skirt was torn while I was kicking high.
It was very naughty.


when I was elementary school, I broke my wrist while riding rollerbrade.
so I got a cast on wrist. To make it worse. it was hot a summer.
I could not wash my arm because of the cast arm.
I wanted to scratch the arm.
After taking off the cast on arm , there was bad smell.
and my arm had more hairs and was thin.
In the future I don't want to do that any more.
we should be careful not to hurt ourselves while exercising


If you keep doing what anyone can do, it will be impossible for anyone.
The most important thing to note about innovative reforms is an inertia attitude.
If you go alone, you can go fast, but if you go together, you can go long.

I am determined to get up at 5 A.M. everyday, so I tried to do it. For the first five days, it was not so hard to get up, but it was getting harder for me as days passed by. Maybe I was getting tired and the exhaustion piled up. This morning is the only free time that I have.
 
These days, divorce becomes more popular than before. Maybe people think that their own life is more important than anything else. In other words, people value their happiness rather than sacrificing for their family, so the divorce became more acceptable to the society, but it's beyond a doubt that the child would be hurt. Divorce is a personal choice that should be chosen carefully in a social point of view. 
 
I was a very active kid in my childhood. I fell down while hanging on a iron bar. When I tried to cook ramen, I accidentally poured hot water on my feet. My skirt was also torn while I was kicking high. I was very naughty.
 
When I was in elementary school, I broke my wrist while riding on a rollerblade, so I got a cast on my wrist. To make it worse, it was a hot summer and I could not wash my arm because of the cast. I wanted to scratch my arm, so I took off the cast and there was a bad smell and my arm had grown more thin hair, I don't want that to happen anymore in the future. We should be careful, so we won't hurt ourselves when exercising.
 
If you keep doing what everyone can do, it will be impossible for you to do it. The most important thing to remember is innovative reforms, it is an inertia attitude. If you go alone, you can go fast, but if you go with others, you will go longer.
 
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