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2020-02-28 첨삭요청드립니다.

3years ago, I have been working in the trade company.
After I graduated university , I didn’t have take rest. So I felt burnout symptom.
I want to stop everything and I want to leave anywhere.
This part is so difficult and strange to me.

Sometimes I had a mistake, Whenever I disappointed to me.
Whenever I talked to my boyfriend that I had worked.
After He listened , He always talking to me.
Don’t be depressed. Whoever make a mistake.
But the most important thing is do not make a similar patten mistake again.
You can do this ! Don’t be worry about. He encouraged.
After I listened to him, I work more harder.

3 weeks ago, I broke up with my boyfriend, but he is not next to me.
Thanks to him, I can more grow up , So I’m studying about trade and working hard.

3years ago, I have been working in the trade company.
After I graduated university , I didn’t have take rest. So I felt burnout symptom.
I want to stop everything and I want to leave anywhere.
This part is so difficult and strange to me.

Sometimes I had a mistake, Whenever I disappointed to me.
Whenever I talked to my boyfriend that I had worked.
After He listened , He always talking to me.
Don’t be depressed. Whoever make a mistake.
But the most important thing is do not make a similar patten mistake again.
You can do this ! Don’t be worry about. He encouraged.
After I listened to him, I work more harder.

3 weeks ago, I broke up with my boyfriend, but he is not next to me.
Thanks to him, I can more grow up , So I’m studying about trade and working hard.

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Three years ago, I worked in a trading company. After I graduated from university, I didn’t have the chance to take a rest. So I felt burnout symptoms. I want to stop everything now and I want to leave and go anywhere. This part of my life is so difficult and strange right.

Sometimes I did a mistake and I felt disappointed to my self. Whenever I talked to my boyfriend about the bad day he always lifts me up and tells me not to be depressed to whoever makes a mistake. But the most important thing is to not make the same pattern of mistake again. He always tells me that I can do this and not to worry about it. But after I listened to him, I still work harder. 

Three weeks ago, I broke up with my boyfriend so he is not next to me anymore but thanks to him I grow up from his advice so I’m studying about trade and working hard now.


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